Aquatonix
Eye of Cthulhu
Thought this was quite good. Was experimenting with words, and swam upon this:
“Waves fluttering, dripping with fear-
Swimming through misery is that craft of artisan.
Whom flows with grace in middle of sea
Our sailor thinks he shall die, but we decides the truth.
Ships rusting, creatures sulking, people crying,
It all washed up in the end, with the misery drowning through it.”
Tell me if it is good poetry, please constructive criticism only.
“Waves fluttering, dripping with fear-
Swimming through misery is that craft of artisan.
Whom flows with grace in middle of sea
Our sailor thinks he shall die, but we decides the truth.
Ships rusting, creatures sulking, people crying,
It all washed up in the end, with the misery drowning through it.”
Tell me if it is good poetry, please constructive criticism only.