The pass looks pretty promising!
Since I really only play mage style characters thats what I can provide input for, so from just looking at the numbers:
The magic crit chance on the mystic looks a little heavy handed, as at 0.05% (that's what the in game tooltip states, but looks different from what the chart has? unless im just reading it wrong) it requires level 200 to hit the cap at 10%, which seems a little high considering you will realistically never hit that (I think anyways). Other than that i'll do some playing with it tomorrow to see how it all feels!
Oh and one question, on the chart it says that the mystics periodic_ManaPercent_LEVEL has a value of 1 where as the sages has a value of 10, not sure if they should be the same? Basically i'm just curious as to what the function of that variable is. (Such as is it a multiplier based on level for the mana regen, or is it additive with the current value etc.)
Awesome work though! Really excited to see where the mod goes